Reviews of my screenplays -
“... a fundamentally sound graphic style screenplay. The intense, raw, dramatic action is laced with violently grotesque imagery and sadistic characters each of which provide the foundation for a rather well developed love story. The action sequences are described in intricate detail; each is expertly crafted, well timed, and professionally orchestrated. The author provides explicit verbal illustrations that grip the reader in a compelling albeit sometimes revolting way. Overall, it’s a hard-hitting, edgy script, offering well-executed transitions and seamless flowing movement. The storyline is compelling based on a complex and twisting plot, which keeps the reader interested throughout. The author skillfully mixes dramatic elements with exciting action sequences to produce a quick paced, smooth transitioning, easy to read page-turner." Studio Reader
"The writer has an original and very cool hyper stylized vision that’s unlike anything I’ve quite read before. The energy is infectious and the exciting risks taken make it an enjoyable. Marcus and Faith are both unique protagonists with distinctive quirks and intriguing...a really fantastic villain and is effectively utilized to create tension and looming consequence for the protagonists. His Kama Sin and especially the dread/mystery of the SITA room are effectively utilized." Studio Reader
"There is a unique voice to the style and writing. It is like early Tarantino writing Sci-Fi. So there is most certainly not only a market for this type of material, it is the type of market that has ‘cult-like’ potential." Studio Reader
"I always know when I get a script from you, I need to buckle up because it's going to be an intense ride. This script did not disappoint, from that perspective. It started with gritty action and ended with an intriguing and surprising character moment. In between there were inspired moments, such as when the sniper on the roof turns the tables on Delta. Or when it's revealed that the sniper is a beautiful woman. Mostly, I thought it was a cool concept whereby you're introducing these well known characters(Jack The Ripper, Rasputin, Red Riding Hood) and recasting them in a modern tale. I think that's really clever. This story exists in a dark, violent world..." Studio Reader
"An intriguing, stylistically powerful script. A distinctive style and setting which could work well as a gritty indie drama/thriller but which should also translate effectively into the medium of the graphic novel.
Particularly notable is the contrast between the script’s essentially innocent, ROMEO AND JULIET-esque love story, and its brutally violent urban milieu. The two title characters are immersed in a world of filth, depravity, and cruelty, but aren’t corrupted by it. The leads function as an effective rooting interest: we want to see them get out of the dark world that spawned them.
Many elements of the story would work well in comic-book form -- particularly the settings - high-soceity sex clans, nighttime streets, subway platforms, run-down apartments, industrial wastelands, etc. There’s an opportunity here for an artist to create a bleak, dystopian environment, tinged with elements of film noir – pools of light and shadow in the urban streets, dark chiaroscuro shadows, expressionistic foreshortened hallways, etc. The violence, also, would lend itself well to a kinetic, brutal Frank Miller style – not only the moments of battle (e.g. Marcus’s fight against James and Oscar with a tire iron), but the satanic horrors of the “Sita Room” as well.
One of the script’s strongest components is the character of Marcus himself – particularly his sharp, self-aware dialogue, his strange free-associative stand-up routines, and his ability to use humor to undercut the menace of his enemies. As a character, Marcus is reminiscent of Paul Newman in COOL HAND LUKE – not the greatest fighter in the world, he is distinguished mainly by his capacity to absorb seemingly endless punishment. While Marcus is a character crying out for a strong actor to embody him, his dialogue reads well off the page and should translate nicely to a graphic novel. A lot here is impressive - mistrue of violence and innocence, its central love story, and its grim, atmospheric setting all give it a unique feel." Studio Reader
"Scripts like this one usually come off feeling too affected and have no new spark to bring to the
table, but this one feels oddly authentic - without needing to be realistic - and has a charge to it. A
lot of the strokes here, about drugs, sex, and violence, are clichéd, but the author doesn’t pretend
they’re wholly original, instead embracing this sort of pop grit as practically its own genre. .. despite those very expected criticisms, the script’s accomplishments shouldn’t be overlooked. It is hard to not get excited about an overblown crime love stories...
Some of the images in this script are pretty indicative of what makes this it original and enjoyable. There is a Tarantino-like fullness to its influences and tastes that is impressive and absorbing, and not at all copycat, even though it is, in a way, an amalgamation of references. The author is aware that the world right now is especially sensitive, so this kind of thing, like Marcus’ stand-up, just isn’t welcome. However, niche audiences will like exactly that about it. CONSIDER." Studio Reader
"... a script that I read with much interest. Not based on the concept, nor the type of project – but simply because you have a fantastic talent for making someone interested. Formatting is impeccable -action lines are divvied up into bite-sized lines that give the impression of pace and movement at all times. What's most important, though, is that you write with confidence and certainty – and that's the hardest thing for people to fake. This translates to the stylised dialogue...with regard to action/description, this is where your writing really shines. You seem to demonstrate two key modes – relatively calm moments where you paint adetailed, evocative image (eg. 'her read suicidal eyes dart with anime-ecstasy' p.13) and moments of violence where you descend into a bloody mess of profanities and pain. You manage to contrast these scenes by changing your voice to suit and that is a remarkable thing to do..." Studio Reader
"Marcus and Faith is the type of script that’ll grab you by the short hairs, draw you in(one malevolent step at a time), and then hammer you with unrelenting, torturous sequences, which are both gross and engrossing. The audience’s attention is fixated, like that of a passer-by at a car wreck, who knows s/he probably shouldn’t be slowing down to look, and God knows s/he shouldn’t be enjoying it, but deep down, underneath the surface, can’t help but to at the very least take a peek, and at the very most revel in
someone else’s misery, if only because it’s not his/her own. The idea of star-crossed lovers is not necessarily new, but there does seem to be genuineness to the proposed relationship that will seemingly capture the audience’s attention, and will create a character connection to sustain it throughout.The writing style has a Tarantinoesque feel to it, which works well with the overall structure, tempo, and storyline. The descriptive and visual elements are superbly crafted, both well written and visually stimulating. Overall great job!" Studio Reader